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this scene is almost exactly how i imagne in a fanfic i would like to write of nanofate, but not yet, i want to think it well before starting... but is amazing how people can think the same thing.

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I also had an image like this in mind >.>
Too many ESPers around, I say~ Please stop sharing the Level Upper XD

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Think? *gasp* someone who actually thinks about the stories before they write! *dies* XD I personally dont think before I write...I write first, think later. But you are right...this is a good inspirational picture for a fic.

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Improve tymz~

It was a grim day today on the memorial grounds of the TSAB fallen soldiers. The clouds above were tempestuous, and the rain they held stung like a million bullets, but the pain in my heart was far worse. The one I love had just died. It was a routine mission they said in a calm voice, but a ‘routine mission’ usually meant the following: high-ranked mages, no backup, and no return.

Fate was the best soldier out there. She was the strongest, the fastest, and the most selfless person you could ever meet. She had died trying to save a small child from a crumbling building, unfortunately, they didn’t make it. An enemy mage had hidden behind some debris, and when they saw Fate make a mad dash towards the child, they fired a single shot. That one shot was aimed towards Fate, but the trajectory was off and it flew straight towards the child… Fate jumped in the way and it pierced through her heart.

My heart twisted in agony as I recalled the reports. I couldn’t bear to read it all, the stupid thing was too detailed, how could I? How could I read the papers that told me how the love of my life had died under my command? It was impossible. How could I face anyone as a leader after this indelible sin? It was impossible.

The rains pelted the funeral goers, but none of them cared. They all shed their tears unabashed, but I think I was crying the most. Even people who didn’t know Fate as well as I did cried their hearts out. She was a hero, the true Ace of Aces.

Fate’s lover stood by Amy, her eyes sombre and empty. She had her eyes on me, watching me curiously, almost leering at me. I loved Fate more than anything else in the world, and Nanoha knew that, that’s why she took her from me. She refused to let someone have what ‘rightfully’ belongs to her, and I couldn’t disagree. She had Fate wrapped around her little finger the moment she saved her. And what did I do? I almost destroyed the world and encased Fate within a dreamlike world where everything was painfully perfect.

The pain in my chest was unbearable, but what was it like to be in Nanoha’s shoes? She and Fate had been together since we were kids, they did everything together. They studied together, fought on the battlefield together, made love together, raised a child together… they would have died together too had it not been for me. Nanoha probably resented me for doing that to her.

On the sixth day, of the sixth month, of the sixth year of this century, Mid-Childa had lost its greatest hero.

An ironic day to die for the lover of the White Devil.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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;_;
Even with the somber tone, this is really beautiful. Really feel for Nanoha too, filling out the things they've done in their time together reinforces it. Love how you ended it off :)

Good job on this one~

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:] Not bad for writing on the spot, ey?

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Pff, you could write a good story in your sleep even, I bet~ :3
Indeed, it's very well written :)

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xDD No, no, I'm not -all- that great. Just lots of practice, inspiration, and free time... My wife on the other hand might be able to write in her sleep though. She's the real writing genius in the family. :3 I've just been trying to copy her example recently... and it's a big, big improvement.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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What is this thing called 'free time' ? XD

I've read "Just be Friends" D: It's so well written, I can understand you being being inspired by your wife :3

I'll be doing my best in my writing as well~ *salutes*

Do my eyes deceive me or is that Yumi from Marimite in your avatar?

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Lol there were some errors in her story... mostly because it was my fault. I actually goofed on the glossary. D:

And this 'free time' is the time I get when... uh... nvm, I has no free tymz. >:

I read your story just before I did something! It was -really- good, :DDDD

And yes, it is Yumi.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Humans make mistakes, no worries~ :3

Free time is a li-

Thankies, I am honoured that you enjoyed the fic~ Will be doing my best with it :)
But, Noriko is best...Eriko too:P

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I honestly don't even like that show... it reminded me how unlady like I am. >:

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Beautifuly (and shortly) written!

-Nanofate forever!- (Love Jack)

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Glad you enjoyed it.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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good job