I will post here the exact same thing I told you when we were talking about this story. I believe my exact words were...
WHAAAAAAAAAT?!?!!?!?!
Yeah...I also recall saying
I...was definitely not expecting this.
I am going to further state that I somehow get the sense of feeling that you are trying to make my alignment into a Chaotic/Evil judging from how Vivio was reacting to Fate in the previous chapter. I am NOT Chaotic/Evil you big meanie! I am Lawful/Neutral or at least Chaotic/Neutral *sobs* :p
there, there *pats Alicia-chan's head*
Don't worry, we all know it's just the big bad man that made you do it. Just wait a little... I'm sure Alts!Nanoha will be "befriending" you soon enough XD
Good chapter,as usual :3
I feel for Fate here, if I was in her shoes, me too I'd want to return to my world and my family.
So, in this world, Alicia is alive and Fate is dead ? mmmhhh, so Nanoha still has a possibility of "befrieding" a red-eyed blonde through sheer firepower...
Based on the little we know about AltAlicia, she seems to be what Fate could've been if Nanoha didn't "befriend" her, interesting..., a tailored job for our favorite slate-blue eyed brunette. :3
*gasp* I would never hurt Vivio you cold hearted beast! *sobs* but ok for the flow of the story I'll let it slide lolz. Very very interesting storyline. I can only imagine how things are going to go from here on out.
Wow! *got blown away*
This is really amazing story! I just caught up and finished reading chapter 5. I think it's an interesting spin on StrikerS, and obviously well thought out by a very talented author. To have Fate appear in a parallel/alternate universe a few years back (so that she's already been through the Saint's Cradle case) which gives the good guys an edge, plus the repositioning of some of the pawns supporting cast like Caro and Erio to "even the odds" (as well as deepening the mystery) is a nice touch.
While the story plot is quite creative, I think what truely shines here is in its "execution". In other words, I feel that Satashi-sama has taken some great story ideas and woven them into a true masterpiece. Not only does she have excellent writing skill, but more importantly, she succeeded in engaging me as the reader and drew me into the story world. I found myself deeply engrossed as I read each chapter, wanting to know what's gonna happen next, how everyone's gonna react to Fate's unexplained presence, how she's going to face the Nanoha who's falling in love with her all over again... It sure helps that the characters are very likable and familiar. I can easily visualize Hayate's playfulness when she teaches Vivio to cosplay or how Vita scowls at still being treated like a kid by Signum and Shamal -- like I've known them for years (and indeed I have as they're very "true to form" and belivable). In addition, the attention to little details really adds to the story's ambience, like how Nanoha deals with everyday life in a wheelchair, how Fate adjusts to her peculiar circumstances (such as changing uniform, opening bank account, trying on Nanoha's presents), how the new sleeping arrangement led to intertwined hair (LOL!), how Vivio slowly warms up to her "Mamas", etc. etc... I could go on :)
The ability to tug at the readers' heartstring -- to enable them to immerse themselves in the story and feel the joy, love, sorrow, and emotions along with the characters -- is the sure sign of a great writer. I really like the leading paragraph of each chapter which details the intimate feelings of one of our beloved heroines at a particular moment in time. It gives me a "window to their soul" and connects me deeper to the main characters. I also enjoy the liberal sprinkling of Nanoha and Fate's inner thoughts throughout the chapters as they provide me better insight into their emotional state as well as how they relate and feel towards each other. I think their moments together are so tender and loving. They sure make a cute couple, if there ever is one. At the same time, there's an undercurrent of sadness that casts an ominous shadow over all the joyful moments due to their anticipated eventual parting and the uncertain fate (pun not intended :) For this reader, the relationship dynamics of the Alt!Nanoha x Fate pairing is undoubtedly the most enjoyable part of this wonderful story.
I'm eagerly awaiting the next installment! *panting* XP
Great chapter. The things are getting more complecated in the story. Mmm... Alicia is alive and she seems one of the bad guys o_O
I love the story!! Huge fan of your work and I can't wait for the future chapters! :)
hm... nanoha almost kissed fate if it weren't for vivio calling for nanoha :3
this chapter makes me doubt a little if fate will seriously return to her actual world. Despite being loyal to the nanoha in her own world i think she would fall this nanoha in the alternative nanoha as well since its the same nanoha characteristic just a little different in appearance.
Fate is feeling a little unstable, i think the alternative world nanoha might score fate and i serious think it might happen depending on how Satashi plot her fic. :3
as always satashi nice story. :3
Seems like people ehre also support the Alts!Nanoha x Fate pair :D
*waves a Alt!NanohaxFate flag while standing in a lifeboat*
Hell yeah! XD
Count me in too! *holds onto lifeboat for dear life* xD
(I'm so sorry, to the "real" Nanoha... but if she finds out how this Nanoha was dealt such a rotten hand -- having to live a life of loneliness without ever finding her soulmate or experiencing true love, I believe she'll be quite sympathetic and understanding if her Fate-chan ended up sharing a few, ummmm, "intimate moments" with her other self)
Count me in too! *holds onto lifeboat for dear life* xD(I'm so sorry, to the "real" Nanoha... but if she finds out how this Nanoha was dealt such a rotten hand -- having to live a life of loneliness without ever finding her soulmate or experiencing true love, I believe she'll be quite sympathetic and understanding if her Fate-chan ended up sharing a few, ummmm, "intimate moments" with her other self)
Yeeeah! Someone who understands me! XD I know Fate has to return to her "real" Nanoha sooner or later but I would like Fate to share a few "intimate moments" before she does. ;p I also do believe that Nanoha would be understanding if Fate does get a little..."touchy". XD But it's up to Satashi. :)
*reaches over and pulls in Yuuno*
There you go! :3
*gets out a binocular and begins to search for drowning comrades*
Maybe two Nanoha can share Fate
Fate spent Mon, wed, fri with "real" Nanoha and Tue, thu, sat for Alt Nanoha
And Fate have Sunday to rest =))
Maybe two Nanoha can share Fate
Fate spent Mon, wed, fri with "real" Nanoha and Tue, thu, sat for Alt Nanoha
And Fate have Sunday to rest =))
*nosebleeds*
Fate is going to be VEEEEEEERY busy...
*wink*
erm... i'm not sure with the idea of having 2 nanoha and 2 vivio...
i would prefer fate to either choose to be with alter nanoha or her world nanoha.
either way both side will be hurt but i'm putting my bet on fate returning to her world nanoha. I'm sry alter nanoha! >.<|||||
Wow...this is going to be an incredible debate soon lolz. Are you reading all this Satashi? We've got a lot of work to do XD
That was EPIC!!! Alicia finally shows! How did I not see her as a racecar driver??
Alicia + Race car = WIN!!!
I love how you wrote the racing scene; I actually felt as if I was there! :)
Please write more!
Great update as always, I wonder if this "Alicia" is really the Fate from this Universe or someone else. The befriending seems imminent xD
The race scene and the conversation betewen Alicia and Jail are interesting.
I think like Haru, that maybe this Alicia could be the alternative Fate from this world, and for some reason she takes her sisters name.
I´ll be waiting for the next part ^^
*gasp*!!! I cant believe you used me and gave her my--! Anyway I couldn't help but smirking. What can I say *claps* Very well done *grins*
I never expected Alicia to be a race driver, well done. :3
Also, the relation between Jail and Alicia seems to be shaky.
I wonder what Alicia is going to do now...seems that she didn't know about Fate, I just hope she is not going to try to kill Fate or something, but she doesn't seems to be like that...
Me? Not kill you? You seem to misunderstand dear sister...I am now everything that you are! We are truly one again, the universe has no need for the both of us! This world has room for only ONE blond-haired red-eyed character! *evil laugh*
lolz To be honest we dont know, I am just launching ideas at satashi whenever we meet, but in the end its up to them how its going to be written. It is Satashi's story after all hehe.
do I sense... "sibling rivalry" here? XD
Chapter 5 cont.
"No, no," Nanoha corrected happily. "That's Aunt Fate."
"Fate?" Vivio blinked, pointing again. "Alicia."
Fate knelt down slowly, reaching out to Vivio to make the girl look at her. "Vivio?" Her voice was soft, almost shaking. "Where did you hear that name?"
"But... that's your name." Vivio looked confused.
"No, my name is Fate....Alicia... is my sister."
Nanoha gasped. "You have a sister!? Why didn't you say so?"
"She died," Fate whispered. "I... no its a long story. Vivio, where did you see Alicia?"
"With the bad man." The child shivered. "She hurt me."
"Vivio, this is really important," Fate's voice got a little firmer. "I need you to think hard, okay? Tell me, where did you see Alicia?"
Vivio leaned back against Nanoha, unsure of what she should say. "I... don't know... In a dark place...There were lots of red and blue lights..."
"Red and blue lights..." Fate repeated the words while standing.
"Fate-chan?" Hayate asked with concern. "What's going on?"
Fate shook her head. "The bad man has to be Jail. The red lights are probably relics..."
Nanoha looked up at her. "...And the blue?"
"...Life pods, the liquid glows an eery blueish green. The numbers were created that way."
"Numbers?" Yuuno asked.
"Combat cyborgs, like Subaru and ginga. They were created by the project Fate system, but a little bit differently depending on which one"
Hayate shook her head. "No, that was destroyed years ago and even if it wasn't, that system doesn't create cyborgs, it creates humans."
"Like me," Fate confirmed. "I am a clone of my sister Alicia. The TSAB may have forbidden the practice but it doesn't mean it isn't done..." She looked down at Vivio, unsure if she should continue or not. "There's another, a clone created by the DNA of the Sankt Kaiser."
Hayate looked at Vivio and then back to Fate. "We need to talk about this."
"Later," Fate whispered. "I need... some answers first." Turning, she walked to the door.
"Fate-chan!" Nanoha scolded her. "Don't leave us!"
"I'm sorry." Fate looked over her shoulder. "Hayate, I need to go off on my own. If Alicia is alive, I need to find her."
"Fate-chan, we don't even know if that's true." Hayate disagreed. "I can't allow you to-"
"Please." Fate said the word hard. "this is important to me."
"...Fine. You can go."
Nanoha gasped. "Hayate-chan!?"
The short woman watched Fate leave the room. "We don't have enough information to require her to be present. If she can get some more info to bring back to us, then her leaving now will benefit everyone."
"But-"
"Nanoha-chan," Hayate said the name a little sternly.
Vivio looked at everyone in the room in turn before slowly hugging onto Nanoha and resting her head on the woman's chest, not liking the tension in the room.
~**~
Fate leaned against the metal bar of the swing set support beam and looked out over the playground she was standing at. The sun was setting across the buildings lining the horizon, making the light fade at an ever increasing rate. 'Alicia...' The name brought back bittersweet memories. The small amount of time she had spent with her sister inside the book of darkness had left a lasting impact on her. 'If she's alive in this time... Does that mean that mother perfected the design, or that Jail completed it?' Shaking her head, Fate took to walking around the small play area. 'Vivio was scared of me because she mistook me for my sister... Does that mean that she's working with Jail?' Her red eyes looked up into the sky. 'So many questions...' As she lowered her eyes, she saw a lone boy standing on top of the stairway leading up into the park. Red hair fluttered in the wind as a breeze came by and a smirk graced his face when the blonde started walking towards him.
"You knew you were being tracked," Erio stated the obvious.
"Yes," Fate agreed simply while lifting her hand to release the small thumbtack type device that Lutecia had stuck on her. The tracker flew to Erio, who accepted it into his palm. "I need to talk to you."
"About?" Erio stood his ground, looking down at Fate at the base of the stairs.
"Alicia."
"Who's that?"
Fate frowned. "Don't pretend, Erio. You and I both know you know who she is."
Erio shrugged. "You're mistaken. Even if I did, what would be in it for me?"
"Have you given up on Project Fate already?"
The boy leapt down in front of Fate at once, glaring up at her. "What do you know about it?"
Fate stayed where she was without flinching. "I was born the same way."
"You lie."
"My DNA was taken from Alicia Testarossa, Precia's daughter."
Erio snorted at her. "That plan failed, the doctor told me about it."
"He lied. Alicia is still alive and I need to find her."
The two looked at each other a long moment before the boy spoke again, walking around Fate in a slow circle. "Tell me, Fate, How is it you know so much? I did some research after I saw you were with that mobile force unit, and your name was never mentioned. It was as if you just appeared."
Fate took a breath. "That doesn't matter."
"If you are who you claim to be, where did you escape from? What lab where you in, and why didn't I know about it?"
"I was born twenty years ago, or so. I was away from here while I grew up."
"You don't look that old."
"I age well." Fate met Erio's eyes when he stood in front of her again. "Please, Erio, tell me where Alicia is."
"I don't know who she is." Erio replied back again. "I do know, however, that the doctor would tell me if he had any information on my origins. That is part of our deal; I work for him, he provides information about me and helps me protect my summoners."
Fate sighed. "Erio, he is tricking you. He did the same thing in my timeline-"
"Oh hooooooo," Erio slid his hands back into his pockets. "Your timeline, huh? This suddenly got interesting."
"Erio!" Fate almost shouted. "Listen to me!"
"You're not my mother." He grinned.
"I'm your sister!" Fate reached out and gripped the boy's shoulders. "Trust me!"
Erio looked at the hands a moment before lifting his own to make them release him. "I was hoping for a more informative conversation. I'll be on my way now."
"Erio!"
"Next time we meet," The boy glanced over his shoulder. "We won't be talking." With that, his body blurred slightly as he ran away from her.
Fate looked at the spot where Erio once was and slowly sank down to her knees. 'Why is everything so suddenly complicated...? Hugging herself, she felt tears escape her eyes. 'Erio... Caro...Nanoha... Alicia...' Holding herself tighter, she forced herself not to cry. 'I just want to go home...'
~**~
Fate opened the door to Nanoha's room slowly. "I'm back," The soft spoken greeting was answered by Vivio, who suddenly ran across the room with Nanoha following.
"Welcome home!" Vivio shouted out, reaching for Fate's legs. The hug didn't go as planned and Vivio found herself falling forward, only to be swept up by Fate's arms. "Wah!"
"Don't run inside, Vivio," Fate scolded lightly.
Nanoha stopped and looked up at her friend. "What's wrong, Fate-chan?"
"Nothing... I just..." The blonde let out a hard sigh. "I'm just really home sick right now. It went from just waiting to go home to suddenly realizing that things are going on here that are just so complicated... Why is Alicia alive? Is it even her or just another clone like me?"
"Fate-chan..." Nanoha reached out and took the hand that wasn't balancing Vivio on the blonde. "You're more than just a-"
"Thank you, really, but you don't know. Knowing I'm a replacement for Alicia isn't that bad since I always had friends who helped me identify myself... but being here... where I died... and she's alive... It just makes me feel..." She looked down. "Even more like I don't belong."
"Aunt Fate?" Vivio's words made both women look at Vivio. "Don't be sad."
"...Thank you, Vivio." Fate bent over and sat teh girl on Nanoha's lap. "I'm going to take a shower, okay?"
"Ah, I have dinner ready for us alre-"
"Thank you." Fate shook her head. "I just want to be alone right now.
The two watched Fate walk away from them and go up the small ramp leading to the upper half of the room. "Mama?" Vivio patted Nanoha's shoulder to get attention on her. "What's wrong with Aunt Fate"
"...Its an adult thing," Nanoha moved her chair over to the dining room table and transferred Vivio over. "Here, let me get your dinner ready."
After eating her fill and making sure Vivio ate her vegetables, Nanoha plopped the small girl onto the couch and gave her the coloring books they had gotten earlier. Vivio took to the new task at once, proclaiming that the coloring books were full of ghost that she had to bring back to life by coloring them. With her temporary child taken care of, Nanoha went upstairs and knocked on the bathroom door. "Fate-chan? You okay, you've been in there for almost an hour."
"...Yeah, I'm sorry." The sounds of water splashing came as the woman stood up. "I lost track of time."
"Its okay..." Nanoha leaned back in her chair and took a deep breath. "Hey...?"
"Yes?"
Looking at the closed door in front of her, Nanoha brought a hand to her chest and gripped her shirt. "I know its hard being here... And this may not really help but... I'll listen if you want to talk about it... Because you're important to me, even if there is an Alicia in this world. Fate-chan is Fate-chan, no matter what." No answer came for a few moments, leaving Nanoha to wonder if she should just leave or call out Fate's name again. Before she could make up her mind on either, the door opened to reveal a still damp Fate with hair that was still dripping slightly.
"Nanoha..." Fate's voice shook slightly and her puffy eyes revealed that she had been crying for quite a while. The woman in the wheelchair opened her arms and got a wet hug at once. "Thank you. I really needed that..."
"That's what I'm here for," Nanoha whispered back to her. When they parted, Nanoha felt herself take in Fate's figure in just the towel. "Get dried off, I'll do your hair, okay?"
"...Okay," Fate nodded and slowly retreated back into the bathroom, closing the door softly.
Nanoha smiled to herself as she looked down at her now wet clothes. 'For some reason, being able to help her makes me feel so much better than when she just spends time with me.' Moving over to the balcony of the bedroom, Nanoha looked down at Vivio. The girl was still coloring contently, a pleased smile on her face. Taking the moment to check on the girl, Nanoha felt a warm feeling in her chest. Her mood lifted and she contently watched Vivio swap crayons several times as she worked. When Fate finally came out again, Nanoha turned and smiled at her, getting a weak one back. "Come here," Nanoha requested while moving to the bed. Raising Heart formed the bars for her to grab a hold to so she could shift to the bed but she found arms wrapping around her.
"Here," Fate whispered to her, picking up Nanoha and holding her close while getting onto the bed. Sitting down, she let Nanoha sit sideways in her lap between her slightly parted legs. Arms went around the girl at once and she rested her chin on Nanoha's hair.
"Fate-chan?" Nanoha giggled. "I can't comb your hair like this."
"It'll be fine," Fate whispered to her lightly. "Just for a little bit...?"
"No," Nanoha answered back, shifting so she could wrap her arms around fate as well. Her head rested against Fate's shoulder and she squeezed her softly. "Not just for a little bit, but for a long time."
"... Thank you."
"Stop saying that," Nanoha scolded her gently. "Don't thank me for things I want to do." Raising her head, she brought a finger to Fate's chin and made her look at her. Leaning forward, Nanoha touched their noses and rubbed them together playfully. "Eskimo kisses make everything better."
Fate couldn't help but give a laugh. "You're so weird."
"I know," Nanoha smiled brightly, watching Fate reach up to take her hand. "But aren't I supposed to be holding you when comforting?"
"We can swap later, I prefer this." Fate replied in kind, closing her eyes when Nanoha went to touch their noses again. "Silly."
"Yes..." Nanoha inhaled lightly, shifting so her nose missed the playful kiss and moved her lips closer to Fate's.
"Mama!" Nanoha jerked back, panting and looking as if she had just heard an explosion. "Mamaaa?"
Fate smiled happily, missing what Nanoha had just tried for. "Get used to it, she didn't get over her 'yell for mama' phase until she was nine."
Nanoha sighed. "I'm coming, Vivio-dear!" She felt herself being picked up yet again and moved to her chair. 'The joys of motherhood...' Despite this, she smiled to herself.