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[Fanfic] Final Stand, Endless Fall

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So I was talking to Siggy on MSN and managed to remember a scene I'd written out for my fanfic, far in the future.

It's made of low-action, high-dialogue corn syrup. :3

Warning: May contain high levels of angst, heartbreak, general sadness, and OOC behavior. Pregnant women and young children are not advised to get on this ride.

Anyways! Without further ado...

Spoiler: Angst for Siggy!
Several sets of feet set down on the ground, forming a loose circle around the person in the center, locking her in. The blonde leader of the small pursuit group narrowed scarlet eyes at her target, her expression a mixture of desperation and rage.

Their target remained unperturbed, even bored by the situation she had found herself in. Glancing back at the blonde, she raised a single delicate brow as inquiry.

Biting back a snarl, the blonde bit out, "You've led us on a long chase, but I refuse to let you go! Not when you've kidnapped Nanoha and are the only one who knows where she is!"

Their target merely sighed before turning fully towards the fuming blonde, "And what, pray tell, makes you think that I'll spill everything so easily? In fact, why are you trying so hard? The girl isn't of any use to the Bureau, so why have you dispatched such a large force? Chrono Harlaown, one of the youngest admirals to reach such a rank. Yagami Hayate, upcoming ace and star of the ground forces and her servants the Wolkenritter. And yourself, ace enforcer Testarossa."

Hayate, positioned next to the raging blonde, interjected, "It's because Nanoha-chan's our friend! I refuse to let her be used in whatever plot you've concocted!"

Chrono chose this moment to speak up, "Regardless of her current status, her past services to the Bureau warrant our protection, return her now and your sentence will be much lighter."

The figure shook her head, "I didn't ask either of you... tell me... what drives you so hard? Do you rage at the fact that, once again, you can do nothing when you believe that Nanoha's in danger? Well, Alicia?"

Alicia grit her teeth at the question, "No, it has nothing to do with that. I follow her because I love her! Something you couldn't understand! And she loves me too! I refuse to let the woman I love be put in danger by you! Now where is she, Fate?!"

At this, Fate burst into laughter, one that conveyed not joy, but rather amusement at someone else's misfortune.
"Love you? You think that she loves YOU?! Foolish sister, she doesn't love you at all! I'M the one that possesses her heart!"

Alicia recoiled as if struck, "No, that's not true! I've seen the love she has for me in her eyes! I won't let you try to trick me! Where is Nanoha?!"

Fate chuckled darkly, "That love you saw, was nothing but a shadow of the love she has for me. She doesn't love you, she loves who your mere appearance reminds her of... ME. Even if you "rescue" her, what makes you think she'll be happy to be with you? Can you truly, with all your heart, believe that to be true?"

Chrono, seeing Alicia's turmoil, interrupted, "Enough of your talk, Fate. Seeing as how you're obviously not going to submit, we will take you in by force and interrogate you for the information you possess."

Fate merely glared balefully at the young man, before crying out, "Very well then. Bardiche, initiate combat routine, execute!"

"Yes, sir," the device responded, before transforming into a large double-bladed axe.

"Come then, fools! You will get nothing out of me except your defeat!" With her final cry, she rushed toward the trio, failing to notice the Wolkenritter slip further away.

Even as she fought against the trio, her mind was elsewhere, to the final moments between her and Nanoha before they had separated.

*Flashback*
"Ne... Nanoha..." the blonde awkwardly started, her arms wrapped around the brunette as they gazed up at the star-filled sky.

"Mm.. Yes, Fate-chan?"

"This world you're from... am I happy there?"

"Yes, you have a loving family, a wonderful daughter and," here Nanoha blushed, "me as your loving wife."

"I see... it must have hurt a lot for you to be split apart from your life like that..."

"It did, but I'm sure that I can get things back to the way they were! Then your life will be good again Fate-chan!"

"...My life here will never be good... the other Fate was lucky, I think, to get to meet you, to fall in love with you..."

"Fate-chan is Fate-chan! I love you Fate-chan! Even if it's not the same,I'll always love Fate-chan!"

As they rested together under the stars, Nanoha's eyes started to droop, exhaustion setting in.

"Ne... Nanoha..."

"Mm... Fate-chan?"

"You've brought me something I thought I lost forever... hope. I swear... I will do anything it takes, everything I can to make sure that you can return to your happiness."

"Thank...you...Fate...-chan..."

*End Flashback*

Fate's attention was brought back to the fight as she felt a barrier snap into place. The Wolkenritter had used the opportunity to cage her in.
Cursing out loud, Fate leapt back, putting herself at a distance from her opponents. They formed a triangular formation around her as she frantically thought of a way to escape.

"It's over, Fate. There's no way you can escape now. It's done, submit and I promise that you'll be treated well," Chrono said in a final act of diplomacy.

In response, Fate slammed the butt of Bardiche into the ground, cracking it as magic roared around her.
Closing her eyes in concentration, she began to channel the mana surrounding her.

"I will never submit, not when Nanoha's dream is on the line! No force will make me, be it you, or the Bureau, or even the very GODS!" she screamed the final word as excess mana from the fight coalesced into hundreds of thin missiles forming a dome around her.

*Nanoha... I'll do anything it takes... everything I can...*

Alicia, Chrono, and Hayate threw up barriers, the wind whipping around them from the sheer energy in the air.
"It's futile, Fate! Even if you defeat us, you won't be able to leave the barrier in your exhausted state!"

*For the sake of this dream... a world in which I can live in peace with a loving family... I will give everything I have.*

"This is the end! You won't get anything from me! Storm Barrage - Finish!"
The hundreds of missiles glowed with power, building up momentum while hanging in the dome formation.

"Brace yourselves!" Chrono cried out as the trio reinforced their shields.
Releasing the restraints on their movement, the missiles proceeded to fly toward their target.

A flash of light.

The roar of thunder.

Three sets of eyes widened.

Fate, standing in the remnants of the dome of mana, smiled softly to herself, blood leaking from the corners of her mouth, her body riddled with hundreds of injuries, injuries brought on by her own final attack.

"You won't... get anything... from me."

As the world started to go dark, Fate could hear her sweet angel's voice, "I love you Fate-chan!"

*Nanoha... I love you... go, and accomplish your dream... Make things right again..*

Scarlet eyes closed, and it was done.

Entire galaxies away, a brunette brought a hand to her heart as it seemed to break for no reason.

"Fate...-chan?"

Phew! That was both very fun to write, and very sad.
Now, before people try to burn me to death.

Spoiler: It was because:
1. Fate couldn't be allowed to survive or else Nanoha would be less determined to find a way back.
2. If she does have to die, she should go out in a bang.
3. That was awesome, admit it.

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I have to agree with your rules XDDD

Awesome ficlet 8D

And don't worry, I'm not one of the people going to burn you to death for writing such awesomeness 8D

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Well I'd hope you'd have enjoyed it, I did write it nearly on the spot for you. :3

Thanks, though. 8D

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AND I have to be really thankful for you for that XD

*breathes in*

*breathes in more*

THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!! 8D

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That WAS indeed EPIC. Well done, Jokul!

The ending (and your reasons for it) totally made sense. I wouldn't have changed anything even if I could. Well, except maybe adding a resolution where

Spoiler:
Nanoha gets back to her own world
or something... But this is fine as it is.

Again, well done!.

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Thanks! Yea, I'll be adding a resolution eventually, when I get around to finishing the story. (Parts 1-3 are here)

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This really really nice ^^ <3 luffed it Excellent work Joku

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Thanks!

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Finally decided tah read it Moko, and I do have tah say, that was purely awsome! Can't wait for the update, and from what I here, I'm gonna get brutally murdered in this tale, (score!) so I can't wait for that to happen. Anyways, good luck with the rest of this story mate, and best of wishes on my part to see it all the way through. ^^

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Firstly, You sound way too pleased to be brutally murderd. ._.
Secondly, I'm Jokul, not Moko.

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If only I could 'like' this post XDD

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*cough* sorry 'bout that Jokul, I was half asleep when I wrote it and it just sliped my train of thought that I could be writing a name that is similar to anothar. Still, I can't wait for the next update.

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