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[Fanfic] Forgotten Fate, Different Destiny

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So I'm takin' a shot at writin' fanfiction. It's doubtful I'll update regularly, or often, or at all, but hey, I've compiled the bits I have written (in the NanoFate chat) into this thread.

Spoiler: ~ Part the Second – A Brand New World ~
Slate blue eyes blearily opened under the assault of the morning sun. Yawning widely, their bearer rose out of here bed, stretching her arms and relishing in the feeling. She idly glanced around her room, before suddenly snapping awake.

"This is... my room back on Earth. What am I doing here? The last thing I remember is going to bed with Fate-chan." The blue-eyed girl blushed to herself in memory of what they had been doing before their slumber. "Something strange is going on here... I need to find Fate-chan!"

(Vv~o~vV)

Slowing to a stop in the park, Nanoha attempted to catch her breath from her panicked run. Something had happened; she was apparently still a high school student, and no one had heard of Fate-chan at the school they were attending. Opening communications with the Arthra in orbit, she sighed in relief as the familiar visage of Admiral Lindy appeared on the screen.

"Nanoha-chan," the aqua-haired admiral began, "are you alright? You seem to be stressed out. Have your old injuries been acting up again?"

"Old injuries?" Nanoha thought to herself, "the incident from years ago didn't cause any more damage after I finished my therapy." Shaking her head, she responded, "No Admiral Lindy, I was just worried because no one knew who Fate-chan was at school! Is she being pulled off Earth for a permanent assignment?"

"That's good, your linker core hasn't been stable since the Book of Darkness incident," the admiral sighed in relief. "But... Nanoha-chan... Who is Fate?"

Struck with surprise, Nanoha could do little more than gape in confusion. How could Admiral Harlaown not remember her own daughter? Hearing footsteps behind her, she quickly bid farewell to the concerned admiral before turning to the source of the noise. A familiar female blonde ran up to her before wrapping her into a hug.

"Nanoha, I heard that you were acting weird at school today, is anything wrong?"
Nearly crying tears of relief, Nanoha wrapped the blonde into a hug before crying out, "Oh Fate-chan! Something's wrong, no one I've talked to can recognize you! Are you alright? Do you know why this is happening?"

Donning a confused expression, the other girl held the desperate brunette at arm’s length, hands on the other girl's shoulders. Looking into tear-filled eyes, she could only reply, "Fate? No, Nanoha... I'm Alicia, remember?"

Spoiler: Author's Notes
So I have a basic idea of where I'm going with this, but it's vague at best, incognizant at worst. The Pt. 2 is not a mistake, I actually had a prologue-ish piece planned out that I haven't written yet. I'll do some editing and add it in if I ever get around to it. I'm gonna be labeling these as parts rather than chapters, 'cause I can't consider it a chapter unless it's several thousand words long.

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Hehe... you posted it XD Good luck with this fic!

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Ah you posted it! I thought you post it in like another week or so, but I guess not~ since you posted now, now you're gunna have to deal with me needing more!~ lol

update soon Jokul-San!

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Everyone but Nanoha forgot Fate ? It looks to be a interesting and mysterious story.

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Poor Nanoha D:

I like this fic's idea, it reminds me a bit of alternatives. I just hope that Nanoha meets again with her Fate-chan someday...

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interesting idea. does Alicia have a relationship with Nanoha?

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alicia has some show time ;P i wonder how nanoha got into this alternate world

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And here's the Part 1 I've been meaning to write. I apologize for new readers who have their reading order skewed slightly.

Spoiler: ~ Part the First – Prelude to Pain~
“For as much as Fate Harlaown and Nanoha Takamachi have consented together in holy wedlock, and have witnessed the same before these witnesses, and thereto have pledged their faithfulness each to the other, and have pledged the same by the giving and receiving each of a ring, by the authority invested in me as a minister of the gospel, I pronounce that they are wife and wife together. Those that have joined together, let no man tear asunder. You may now kiss the brides.”

As two pairs of lips met, the witnesses of the marriage of Fate T. Harlaown and Takamachi Nanoha rose to their feet and cried out in cheer. As the newlyweds separated, their gazes met, slate blue eyes staring into burning scarlet ones.
“Now and forever, I will always be with you.”

(Vv~o~vV)

Fists slammed onto a table in anger as bitter tears flowed from a mauve haired woman’s eyes. Everything she had worked for, the sacrifices she had made had all been for nothing.

“Not even the god-like technology of Al Hazard can bring my precious daughter back to me?” she cried out bitterly, “What then, did I work for?”

Turning her head to the side, she was filled with rage at the sight of that abomination’s joy on the monitor present. Precia Testarossa clenched her teeth; she could not have chosen a worse time to indulge her masochistic desire to check on her second greatest failure.

“How dare she!” the woman screamed angrily, “How dare she live happily while I suffer alone?”

Turning away from the image on the screen, the heartbroken woman whispered to herself, “If only you had never been injured, Alicia… then things would have been perfect.”

Violet eyes widened in realization at the possibility in her own words, before narrowing in determination.

“Yes… perhaps there is a way.”

(Vv~o~vV)

“Nyahaha… calm down Fate-chan, you don’t have to be in such a hurry,” Nanoha told her rapturous bride, “we have the rest of our lives together, you don’t have to rush it.”

Hugging her shorter spouse to her chest, Fate choked out, “I’m sorry but… I’m just, so happy.”

Slate blue eyes adopted a gentle look as their bearer gazed upon the trembling blonde. Fate had finally achieved what she desired for so long after all, a family that she could truly call her own.

“Mm… it’s alright, I don’t mind… not if it’s with Fate-chan.”

With those words, the two newlyweds met and expressed their love for each other physically until their bodies gave out hours later. As they drifted off to sleep, Nanoha could barely hear what seemed to be a whisper.

“It has been a while, white mage… Do accept my wedding present, won’t you? Then again, you don’t really have a choice.”

(Vv~o~vV)

It was said they would never know if her mother had found the 'promised land' of lost technology; but when one day they woke up to a world where Fate had never existed, well… one girl might have guessed.

Spoiler: Author's Notes
Here it is, the great unveil. Now you guys should have some idea of why Nanoha's in a new world with similar-but-different people. Hopefully, I haven't given too much away and the story will still be unpredictable. And yes, I did in fact break Nanoha and Fate apart the night of their marriage. Ain't I a stinker?

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I see that Precia is still as evil and crazy as ever.

I'll look forward to the next part !

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Jokul-san....WHY! T.T on our wedding day too? Bad Jokul-san, now you're going to have to write an update, because if I don't know what happens then I'm cranky, and when I'm cranky someones gonna get SLB'd. :D

Update soon~

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Thanks for the update Jokul, I didn't expect an explanation for Nanoha’s current situation so soon, but it all makes sense now. And you’re one evil writer Jokul, separating them after their wedding, I just hope that they can meet again.

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Hehe, I unveiled it early 'cause of A. the sentence that inspired me and B. this is a story of Nanoha's journey back, not how she got there in the first place (although the two are related somewhat).

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Fu fu fu~ it seems that Alternate worlds are the trend right now. AltS, Moni's entries, and now this. Same thing with Memory losses :p I for one am expecting a lot from this~ Dont let me down fu fu fu~

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Pt. 3 is written. Did the whole thing at 4 AM, so there may be mistakes; feel free to point them out.

Spoiler: ~ Part the Third – The Start of Something Different ~
The giant cat mewled happily to itself as it trotted through the forest. It didn’t know what the shiny blue thing it had found was, but somehow it had grown much larger. The feline noticed a flash of something blonde in the corner of its vision and turned towards the newcomer.

Elsewhere, Takamachi Nanoha activated her barrier jacket before chasing after the supersized pet, her advisor, friend, and pet ferret Yuuno Scrya following closely.

“Mou… finding a giant cat shouldn’t be too hard, so where is it?” the white mage asked herself, looking through the trees for a sign of the errant cat.

Before Yuuno could respond, a loud meow sounded through the forest, and Nanoha quickly followed the noise to its source. She found herself in a small clearing, with the cat happily purring under the affections of a young blonde girl. As she watched, the blonde continued to pet the cat, a staff of some sort held in her left hand.

“There there… who’s a good kitty? Now stay still for me, this won’t hurt a bit,” the blonde spoke softly, but her words carried across the clearing easily. “Initiate sealing, Halberd.”

“Of course, milady,” a feminine voice responded from the staff, which bore a design reminiscent of its namesake. Glowing softly, the weapon proceeded to extract the Jewel Seed from the cat, before sealing the artifact within its amethyst core.

Noticing her company, the blonde turned to the white mage staring at her. “Oh, you must be a local mage. Were you looking for the Jewel Seeds as well?” she inquired.

Having been noticed, Nanoha uncertainly brandished her weapon before replying, “Yes I have. They are very dangerous artifacts and I’ve been sealing them when they’ve been acting up.”

Nodding to herself, the blonde responded, “Yes, I am well aware of how dangerous they can be. That’s why I was dispatched as a preliminary measure, to make sure that the Jewel Seeds didn’t get out of hand. Thank you for your assistance as well, but I’ll be handling things from here.”

“Ah,” the blonde raised her free hand to her mouth, “I haven’t introduced myself yet. I’m sorry; my name is Alicia Testarossa, Junior Enforcer for the Time Space Administration Bureau.”

(Vv~o~vV)

Nanoha’s eyes snapped open as she reflected on what she had seen.

“Was that... a dream? Or something different?”

She checked her surroundings and realized she was in the medical wing of the Arthra, a ship that she hadn’t been aboard in years.

“What am I doing here? The last thing I remember is…Alicia and… Fate-chan!”

The teenaged brunette noticed she was alone in the room, something that hadn’t happened since the accident she had suffered due to her own overexertion. Fate had always been by her side when she woke up after medical treatment since then. The fact that she was missing now was worrisome. She turned towards the door when it slid open; a familiar red-eyed blonde was talking to someone just out of view.

“…I don’t know; she called me Fate before fainting, yes I know she shouldn’t know-” the blonde noticed Nanoha was awake and walked up to her before pulling her into a hug. “Nanoha! You had me so worried when you just fainted like that! Does it hurt anywhere? The doctors couldn’t find any apparent reason for you to pass out like that, but they’re not always right. Are you okay?”

Ignoring the veritable flood of questions regarding her wellbeing, Nanoha cautiously responded, “Um… Alicia? Is that you?”

Amusement replaced concern in those scarlet eyes so similar to those of the bed-ridden girl’s love. Alicia shook her head and chuckled before responding, “Of course it’s me, silly. I just left for a moment to go get someone who wants to talk to you. What, can’t recognize your best friend in the world anymore?”

“Now, now, Alicia… I’m sure Nanoha’s just disoriented from having just woken up. She’ll feel better soon enough.”

Nanoha turned back to the door at the sound of the newcomer’s velvety voice, before paling at the sight of the person standing in the doorframe. Shocked, she couldn't restrain herself from yelling out in surprise.

“P-Precia?!”

Spoiler: Author's Notes
This is just the beginning of the changes (Alicia being friendly to Nanoha as opposed to Fate being hostile) that I've got planned out. I have a whole chart drawn out! Everything you know and love will be changed! Nothing will be spared! Ahahahaahahahah! *Cough* Sorry, I think the exhaustion is getting to me. Yes, it's another cliffhanger-ish-thing I've left you on. I write until I reach one, at which point I stop. Next part will be out the next time I feel like writing. Oh please tell me how you feel about me narrating differences through flashbacks and dreams instead of having characters simply point them out. I think it's more interesting this way.

Edit: Found my own typos. May be more.

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Precia took Lindy's place on the Arthra ? And apparently, both her and Alicia seems to hide something fishy.

I'm cuirous to see what'll happen next time !

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Ah ah ah... that would be telling.
Yes, Precia and Alicia are hiding something, but you won't be finding out about it for a while yet.
As for Precia's place on the Arthra... well, you'll see.

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the chapter is too short. ;_;

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I'm sorry, but there's a limit to how much I can write before I run out of motivation (not inspiration though, still got plenty of that). I'll try to work on writing longer chapters though.

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The concept of alternate worlds has been used before, but this is somehow a refreshing new one.
...And I'm out of things to say. I'd rather not repeat myself and say how awesome this is so yeah...

Seriously, good job and keep going!