A/N: I've had this idea in my head for a while and I finally started to put it on paper... or should I say on my computer. Anyway, I really enjoy to write but I never seem to have time. So if I take forever to update... Well I just hope you like this enough to care! Any sort of critique is welcomed and as a disclaimer: No I DON'T own anything other than my own characters and plot. Let me know what you think!
Enjoy!
The Martyr
Prologue
“I’ll hold him back, just go!” panted her aunt, blood gushing out from several gashes on her barrier jacket.
Please, she heard in her cold heart.
Hayate wouldn’t last much longer and they both knew it. You would expect tears in a girl’s eyes when the only parental figure she had left was about to sentence herself to a brutal death, but all the destruction she had seen, there were no more tears left to shed. Where there was once pain, now held numbness.
As she turned her back on her dying army, she heard those cries of torture from her comrades as the enemy came closer to its target… her.
Instead of making her want to go help them, these screams just made her fly faster. She had to hurry or everything would go to waste, everyone she cared about would have died for nothing.
As she reached the only room in the church not destroyed by the war, she felt the familiar stab in her heart and an increase in the emptiness she felt…
She was now truly the only one left, the only one who could fix this.
Aunt Hayate was just added to the list of people who she had to avenge.
Vita, Shamal, Rein, Signum, Zafira, Subaru, Ginga, Teana, Vice, Uncle Chrono, Aunt Amy, her cousins, her grandparents, Yuuno, Erio, Caro, Friedrich, Arf, the names never stopped.
They all ran through her head as a bright red circle began glow beneath her feet. With each passing name, the power pulsed through her veins, strengthened. The walls around her began to crumble but she didn’t notice. The spell was close too completion and if sidetracked for a split second, it would be a failure.
But she couldn’t fail…
She wouldn’t fail…
Stone started falling around her, but the circle reached its peak…
“Apollo, Athena,” she said in a hoarse voice, “You know what to do.”
“Sì, signore”
“Nai, kýrie”
… I promise Onee-chan, Fate-mama, Nanoha-mama…
… I promise I will change everything…
… No matter what happens, no matter what I have to do, I won’t fail you…
… Not again…
When his men broke into the room, all he could do was curse, because the room was empty.
Miles away, a blonde sighed in relief, “The future and past have now been blurred. It’s all up to her now.”
May the Lord be with you, young Takamachi, thought Carim.
Ooooh very interesting. In here shows the power that ALL humans seek...the power...to control...time *grins* Be waiting for the update ^.^
Objection !!!! the real power all humans seek is an infinite six-pack of cold Guinness !
Interesting, indeed ^^. Mmm, Vivio changing the past and saving the future is a thing I want to see ;).
(I´m little envious, because there are great fanfics posted here and I only can write my fanfics in Spanish x_D, but, anyways, it´s good read yours works ^^, and I´m improving my English xD).
Thank you ^^
Is that Nanoha and Fate's daughter? That would be epic.
I really want to know what happens next, please update soon.
The bases are interesting, I'm eager to know what follows next.
Whoa! a Brunette! And here all this time I thought it was vivio! *gasp* Tell me this isnt Nanoha's copy from Project Fate >< That project has already given me lots of headaches...even more so than Jail ever could
I repeat again, this sounds very well ^^, it´s a really good idea, I want to see how you develop it.
And the little Takamachi isn´t Vivio, mmm...
And I´m waiting for the next chapter.
Please tell me you're about to update...
Wa... so good!
Nanoha and Fate have another child?
I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Oh...my...god...
What an epic story so far! XD I'm kinda wondering who that brunette is and if that brunette would give birth to a child that was the cause of the power surge? Oooh...please update SOON! XDDD
EDIT: OMG! You were born the same day and month as me! Yeah! Bastille children all the way! XD
Wow...this story is turning out really good. Can you update please? :3
And Bastille children?
Wow...this story is turning out really good. Can you update please? :3And Bastille children?
People who are born on Bastille Day, A.K.A. French Independence Day, 7/14 (July 14) (the day the French stormed inside the Bastille prison and massacred all the political prisoners inside...) and there were many things going on that date during the French Revolutionary War that was also not very...nice.
So yeah...we were born during a very chaotic moment in history. You'll be surprised how many people remember my birthday because of that violent day in French history. >.>
EDIT: I hope you do well on your test, Hitomi. :3
We freed the prisonners (14 people iirc) in the Bastille, we didn't kill them, and it was in fact to seize the ammo and weapons inside the fortress ! (>_<)
Besides, France was always independent, we just change from an absolute monarchy to a democratic republic.
We freed the prisonners (14 people iirc) in the Bastille, we didn't kill them, and it was in fact to seize the ammo and weapons inside the fortress ! (>_<)
Besides, France was always independent, we just change from an absolute monarchy to a democratic republic.
DAMN THE AMERICAN BOOKS! XD But I'm still happy to be born on that day....even though I'm not French. ^^; But thanks for clearing that up. :D
langrisser wrote:We freed the prisonners (14 people iirc) in the Bastille, we didn't kill them, and it was in fact to seize the ammo and weapons inside the fortress ! (>_<)
Besides, France was always independent, we just change from an absolute monarchy to a democratic republic.DAMN THE AMERICAN BOOKS! XD But I'm still happy to be born on that day....even though I'm not French. ^^; But thanks for clearing that up. :D
lol you got owned my friend
Alavon wrote:langrisser wrote:We freed the prisonners (14 people iirc) in the Bastille, we didn't kill them, and it was in fact to seize the ammo and weapons inside the fortress ! (>_<)
Besides, France was always independent, we just change from an absolute monarchy to a democratic republic.DAMN THE AMERICAN BOOKS! XD But I'm still happy to be born on that day....even though I'm not French. ^^; But thanks for clearing that up. :D
lol you got owned my friend
Oh, shut it you. :3
You know, I'm French and I studied History in college, and I swear, the history of the French Revolution is one giant mess to begin with... (^_^)
Besides I always found funny people outside France call our National Day, Bastille Day, here, we just call it the "Fête Nationale" or "14 juillet" (~National Celebration Day, or 14th July).
You know, I'm French and I studied History in college, and I swear, the history of the French Revolution is one giant mess to begin with... (^_^)
Besides I always found funny people outside France call our National Day, Bastille Day, here, we just call it the "Fête Nationale" or "14 juillet" (~National Celebration Day, or 14th July).
I'll go with what you say; yay National Celebration Day children! XD \o/
You could keep "Bastille children", it's shorter and much more explicit. :3
Maybe we should change the name of our National Day, Bastille Day fit more.
You could keep "Bastille children", it's shorter and much more explicit. :3
Maybe we should change the name of our National Day, Bastille Day fit more.
Yay, Bastille children! :3
Very good, I wonder who is the brunette...
Good luck in ur test ^_^
The plot is looking very interesting, and the cute NanoFate and family scene was very appreciated. This girl found near the Café seems to be our time traveler, I wonder if she was the cause of the spike the mages felt, or if something else is going to happen and she's back to help to deal with this... if she were to be Nanoha and Fate's real/genetic daughter probably she would be the stronger mage ever xD And please tell me that this brunette has burgundy eyes! ^^
I'm pretty sure the brunette is our time traveller and the source of the magic energy spike, or at least linked to it.
Also, the plot is looking fine.
Interesting, our little time traveler has two devices, and seems to have a sad past behind her.
Somehow, I have the feeling things would be interesting when Fate and Nanoha will encouter her. :3
The plot thickens, I await the next chapter !
Your english is really good!