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[Fanfic] The Martyr

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Great chapter Hitomi!
I like how Hikari is joining the other characters and the attitude of each one towards her. It's a sad thing that she can't tell Nanoha and Fate that she's their daughter, that would have been awesome.
Update soon please~

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Love your story, I eagerly check this thread several times a day in case you have posted a new chapter. :D

I hope you find a workaround for the 'not telling'-part as that would be pure win. Hayate already knows and Vivio seems to be on the right track :P

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Poor Feito-chan... first living thru childhood with an abusive mother, then it is revealed that her father is some kind of megalomaniac XD Boy her past never stops haunting her does it?

Great chapter Hitomi! Love your fast-paced storytelling here!

NanoFate fans please don't send me hate mail... I promise to turn back into a ferret and leave Nanoha (and her waifu) alone XD

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Wow wat a twist! cant wait for the next chapter!
Update soon! XD

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this was great!! Carim figured out she was their daughter?? how is that possible? i know she can tell she was from the future...but their daughter. i guess Carim is just too smart and catches on to the resemblence pretty quickly. go hayate for seeing it a litte. i wonder with hikari's devices are pieces from raising heart and bidarche....COOL!!

kinda sad that nanoha can't see the resemblence...or fate. man. update sooN!!

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hello! exelent chapter, this story is cool! on regards on fate´s father not necesary it would be alicia´s father, it could be the real mastermind behind the F proyect and the one who was suporning jail.
if you want to make it right or either you have to kill jail in order to not have him as a potencial source of information, or make him apear, obiusly if you are going for my idea of fate´s father.
the child is so cool and use fate battle style i love that, have a nice day!keep up the good work!

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i wonder with hikari's devices are pieces from raising heart and bidarche....COOL!!

kinda sad that nanoha can't see the resemblence...or fate. man. update sooN!!

OMG that would be soo coool!
and yea i agree it is sad but i least they all feel somthing wrong and special about her and poor kari-Chan! wat she's went thru idk how she goes on maybe revenge or is it more than that...?

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i think your little subscript explains it all about hikari.

"What kills you makes you stronger"

i think she may be going for revenge...that may be the fuel of her true powers. Like nanoha's power comes from her determination and never giving up.

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Yea your probably right i hope she has some nanoha or fate powers hidden within her cuz there might be a tough one ahead for hikari-chan, but thats wat kinda makes this whole story exciting

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certanly is a good idea, but lets see what the author give us next update.

and the phrase wouldnt be "what doesnt kill you makes you stronger" because i asure you, whatever it is that kills you, is definetly not gonna make you stronger XD ahhahahaha. have a nice day!
PD: sorry for the bad english.

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Great update, Hitomi-chan! XD I really did not see that coming! I can't believe that Fate and Nanoha did not notice the resemblance. Now I too wonder if Kari's Intelligent Devices are pieces of Raising Heart or Bardiche...

UPDATE SOON!!! PLEASE!!! *flail*

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Thanks for awesome chapter, Hitomi-san. I want read more.

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More please!!!
Btw I'm Nanoha-San I'm on my phone

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A/N: Hey guys! sorry for the long wait but here is the new chapter! SAT's on Saturday so I've been pretty busy! Wish me luck and enjoy!

Chapter 6

“Do you think it’s crazy?”

Fate opened her tired eyes and turned her head to the woman next to her.

“What do you mean?” she asked, even though she knew exactly what was causing that troubled look on her wife’s beautiful face.

“That for some reason, everyone seems to trust that girl.”

Even though Hikari was being monitored, she had technically been released from her previous arrest. She was free to leave at any time. This had truly bothered Nanoha and she made certain that Vivio, who had just begun to speak to them, stayed away from the mage.

“Nanoha… everyone knows that she’s not telling us everything, but-”

“Do you feel it?” Nanoha finally met her wife’s gaze, her amethyst eyes searching burgundy ones for answers.

“Whenever you’re around her, don’t you feel something… anything?”

“I do,” Fate admitted. “I can’t explain it, but I feel drawn to her, as if there’s something that connects the two of us.”

Nanoha sighed in relief, “At least someone agrees wi-”

“But,” Fate interrupted. “I do trust her… She wouldn’t have saved our lives if she wanted to kill us.”

“You don’t underst-”

“Have you tried talking to her? Really talk to her? Nanoha… that girl suffered. All you have to do is look into her eyes and see.”

Nanoha was about to reply when a shrill cry echoed through the halls. Fate and Nanoha got out of bed, any trace of sleep washed from their faces. Even though they both wouldn’t admit it, the mages new exactly who screamed. A fear was felt in the pit of their stomachs, for an unknown reason.

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“Get up,” the woman said coldly, watching the young girl struggle to her feet, her breathing ragged, but only ended up on the floor again.

“Get up!” the commander’s voice grew louder and harsher, if possible.

“Nanoha…” Someone began as they stepped closer to the pair.

“Leave her be,” Nanoha commanded, all the while knowing that the person was her superior.

Hayate opened her mouth to retort but fell short when she looked at the little girl in front of them. Even though she was swaying dangerously, young Hikari was able to get back on her feet, all the while grimacing at the blood-oozing wounds throughout her body. The look in her eyes were of sheer determination and strength mixed with love and fear towards the woman in front of her.

Nanoha didn’t take any notice, and got into a battle stance, barely giving the girl time to register what was happening before she attacked. Hayate watched in horror as mother and daughter clashed, one fighting for recognition, the other fighting to punish.

That’s it, Hayate thought. She understood that Nanoha was suffering from the losses of the two most important people in her life, but Hikari wasn’t at fault… No one was except for that man.

“Nanoha, stop!” Hayate commanded while calling her device as Nanoha broke through the ten-year-old’s weakened barrier.

Nanoha ignored her, once again successfully getting through the girl’s defenses.

“You’re weak,” she whispered, her voice breaking. “You always were… that’s why they’re gone.”

Hikari’s eyes watered, feeling a sharp pain in her heart, but she refused to let the tears fall. Nanoha aimed Raising Heart, not wasting another second.

“FATE WOULDN’T HAVE WANTED THIS!” Hayate yelled from behind.

Nanoha’s eyes widened but before she realized what she was doing, a pink beam was shot…

An echoing cry was heard as blood spattered into the ground…

Nanoha dropped Raising Heart and fell to her knees, her tears finally falling…

She didn’t hear Hayate’s frantic commands for Shamal, or see her run past her to aid the injured girl… her daughter.

There was so much blood…

Nanoha stare at her gloved hands in disbelief…

Fate… What have I done?

Hikari woke with a start. She touched the scar on her face, her eyes shut trying to control her ragged breathing and forget the memory that kept repeating in her head, unnoticed tears sliding down her cheek.

Her eyes snapped open when her bedroom slammed open. Apollo and Athena already at hand, she shot out of bed, only to cringe in fear at the woman in front of her, the cause of her nightmare.

Nanoha caught the fear in the girl’s eyes and crinkle her eyes in confusion. She felt a slight push and look behind her to see Fate urging her on. She took a tentative step towards the girl, shocked to see Kari take one step back.

“I- I’m okay,” she murmured, composing herself with her mask set in place.

“No, you’re not,” Nanoha said honestly. “What happened?”

“Nothing.”

“Didn’t sound like nothing,” said Vita, appearing next to Fate, Hayate and Shamal following soon after. Shamal took a step towards Hikari to check her temperature after noting her pale color and sweat, but Fate stopped her.

“It doesn’t matter,” Kari responded, her eyes still locked on Nanoha’s. Nanoha felt unsettled by the familiar eye’s gaze but held her ground.

“No,” she said firmly. “You are going to tell me what happened. No more secrets.”

Kari sat on her bed, her eyes closed while her hands tightly gripped the sheets. “It doesn’t matter. Just let it go, I’m tired and-”

“Why else do you think everyone feels uneasy around you? You won’t even bother to tell us something truthful.”

Don’t you mean you feel uneasy? Kari asked her telepathically.

“Stop being weak and get on with it,” Nanoha said using her commander voice, ignoring the girl’s silent comment.

Weak…

Kari stood, rigid with an anger that had been building for years. Her burgundy eyes blazed with a ferocity that startled all the mages in the room.

“You want to know why you feel so uneasy around me? It’s because of the mark you left on me, the magical residue from your device that has yet to leave me! If you think I got this scar in battle then you’re wrong… It was you. You gave it to me before I even turned eleven, because I wasn’t strong enough for you… you punished me for it with this,” she finished, pointing at the scar.

Nanoha’s eyes widened in astonishment, her head shaking in denial but Fate was right, the emotion in the younger girl’s eyes told no lies.

“Kýrie,” Athena warned.

That seemed to snap Hikari out of her angry daze. Before anyone could stop her, she fled past the group, out the room to the only place she knew she could trust.

After a couple minutes Hayate followed after her, still stupefied by what had just occurred.

“Shamal…” Nanoha started, her lip trembling. “Was she…”

“She wasn’t lying… I should have noticed earlier...”

A bit later Vita and Shamal left too, but Fate didn’t really pay attention. Her own feelings and urges to find Hikari were pushed aside, her heart broke as the love of her life tried to come to terms with the act she had yet to perform.

Nanoha finally understood her feeling towards the girl… it was guilt, uncontrollable guilt that her heart was protecting her from. Her shoulders shook as she fell to her knees, her eyes shut tight, trying to keep the tears at bay. Fate was quick to act, being the shoulder her wife needed to lean on.

No words were spoken...

No words were needed…

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Kari grunted as she blocked another attack from the machine. She had been training for some time now and had finally reached a level of peace, her emotions in check. She got out of her battle stance, sensing a familiar aura waling her way. The machine turned off as she turned to find a pajama wearing Hayate.

“You’ll wake the entire sector if you keep practicing like that.”

“Sorry,” she said. “I should have asked for your permission.”

Hayate held up a hand to silence her.

“I’ve been watching you for a while now. If I wanted to stop you, I would have done it a long time ago.”

Hayate stared at the girl before in wonder, for she had barely broken a sweat after fighting their most powerful training machine. Hikari grinned, finally noticing her superior’s duckling patterned pajamas.

“We should get back… we wouldn’t want anyone to see the great Yagami Hayate wearing such adorable pajamas,” she teased.

Hayate winked and twirled for the girl, “You like? I have a pair that would look adorable on you.”

Hikari shivered at the thought, being reminded of many instances when she found herself in odd outfits to appease her aunt’s fetishes. Laughter broke out between the two, and Hayate realized that this was the first time she heard the girl laugh. She sounded so much like…

“You have your mother’s smile.” The unexpected comment ceased the girl’s laughter, but brought out a nostalgic smile.

“You used to tell me that all the time.”

“I did?” Kari nodded in confirmation.

“You always said that when I was depressed… that it was a shame that I couldn’t see it for myself… Mom didn’t smile much.”

The familiar melancholy look washed over her face and Hayate felt tears coming on. How terrible was this possible future?

Hikari felt arms wrap around her, a terribly missed warmth appearing.

“I’m sorry,” she heard her aunt whisper. “I’m so sorry… I promise you, I’ll do everything in my power to not let that happen.”

Hayate felt the young girl start to shake, feeling tears wet her pajama top. Her arms tightened, a hand lovingly petting the girl’s hair. She never realized how small Kari was… Never took the time to realize that this soldier was just a scared girl who wanted her family back…

Vivio slowly made her way out of her hiding spot, and made her way back to her room. Even though she too wanted to comfort Kari, she knew it wasn’t her place. When she got settled in her bed, she wondered about what was so familiar about Kari’s smile. She turned her body on to its side, her eyes falling on a picture of her and her mamas. Her eyes widened…

No… way

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wow..this story is good..oh!this is my first post here...(pls take care of me!!XD) I love it...so cool you know..can I request something?(to anyone) wee..I wanna see a picture of hikari..ahaha!it would be so cool, I'm sure of it..I can imagine her in my head just that I'm not that good in coloring here in the computer...

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AHHH this was totally awesome!! i'm so happy you updated. it's been a while. but now everyone knows about kari...i didn't expect nanoha to be feeling guilt. that kinda shocked me, especially since she didn't cause the accident yet. hmm

but fate felt the familiarity...not guilt, right?? i hope Nanoha's and hikari's relationship brightens!!

this was all very touching.

GOOD LUCK ON YOUR SAT!! with this mad writing skills, you'll do fine ;P

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This is a very good idea and you are doing a great job so far!

And I like stories with science babies in them.

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Nice chapter !

Poor little Kari, being hurt by Nanoha in the future, it's normal for her to be uneasy with her mother, I hope she'll mend her relationship with Nanoha.

She have a nice relationship with Hayate.

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moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee plsss

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This is another great chapter, Hitomi! Full of raw emotional power. And a very interesting revealation... apparently Fate and Vivio had already died some time ago when Nanoha was training Hikari when she was around eleven. Hmmmm...

In the paragraph describing Hayate hugging Kari to comfort her, I thought it'd be hilarious if Hayate takes this perfect opportunity to -- grope Kari XD (*ahem* just kidding ^^)

Good luck with your SAT!

NanoFate fans please don't send me hate mail... I promise to turn back into a ferret and leave Nanoha (and her waifu) alone XD

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Thanks for the update Hitomi, this was another awesome chapter.

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Wow that was an awesone chapter!

I was so surprised when Nanoha was the one who gave Hikari that scar but still i cannot wait to see whats next! Please Ubdate soon!

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Great chapter, your story never ceases to amaze me, really, every new chapter has a little surprise. You are writting a great story ^^.

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NO WAY!! SAT!!!?? WE HAVE THAT TOMORROW TOO!! (TECHNICALLY TODAY SINCE IT'S MIDNIGHT) WHAT A COINCIDENCE!! MAYBE WE'LL SEE EACH OTHER!! Just kidding :P I don't think we will... since there are LOTS of schools out there doing that... *Scratches cheek* *Giggles* :3

AWESOMENESS CHAPTER BY THE WAY!!! xD Love it!! :D Good luck in your SAT!!! *Thumbs up* (:

You actually ALMOST made me cry... *Wipes oncoming tears* *Sniffs* Even the other chapters... I read them over and over and over and over and over and over and over again and again and again and almost cried... I lied... I did... ^///^ It was sooo sad... if I put myself in Hikari's shoes... SO AWESOME!!! LOVE YOUR UPDATE!!!! ^^

"You can close you eyes to reality but not to memories..."

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hello...i really love this story..it's way TOO cool...XDi love it..please update this..I also found it in ffnet

Nanonymous
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Wow... Little Vivio is smart. Wonder how she'll break her finding to her mothers :)

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What a great story, I love the plotline and i can't wait to read some more. It's still hard to believe that Nanoha and Fate had so much trouble with only one enemy though.

Zenryoku Zenkai!

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This is Alavon...tired...lazy to sign in...but anyway...GREAT UPDATE!!!! XD You made my day better with your update. Please write more!

And now I'm going to hug a Kari plushie... :X

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exelent chapter, it really surprised me when kari said "If you think I got this scar in battle then you’re wrong… It was you" i really tought that awas a battle wound, and never spected to be caused by nanoha, altrough i would like to know more about that depresed nanoha after vivios and fates death, that really intriges me. hope you update soon!

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Hey guys!
As you might have noticed, The Martyr has been on hold for quite a while. AP testing and all the other standardized tests that Juniors must take has really taking up much of my time. Luckily my last AP test (out of 4 T^T) is this friday and after that I will have a lot more time to focus on my story. I know I left it in a cliffhanger but the wait will definitely be worth it.

Coming up next chapter:

  • An insight on future Nanoha and Kari's past... which makes it present Nanoha's future
  • Father and Daughter meet... Nuff said

Lastly, I have to warn you guys that throughout this story (and maybe possible prequel in future) there will be A LOT of Nanoha bashing. I love Nanoha, but you know writers... they get off on making their favorite characters suffer... or maybe that's just me...