Well I don't think it's good because it's my first Fanfic I write I different language than mine lol. I hope You'll enjoy it
Here Begin story by the first Chapter.
Fanfic by Nanoha-sama
Chapter 1 - The beginning
A morning like other, nothing different.
I yawned. It was the morning and I saw Fate-chan and Vivio sleeping next to me. I kissed them two on the forehead, and then I went put my working clothes. It’s time to move ! I went on the training ground and I saw Subaru, Teana, Erio and Caro doing exercise to wait me, maybe I’ve been too long to prepare myself ?
“Hello all, have you good sleep ?” I asked, with my usual big smile.
They all answered me at the same time : “Yes !”
“-Fine so can we start today morning training ?
-We’re ready, Nanoha-san !”
Glad to see them in good form.
“Ok, then let’s start with a ten minute battle, let’s do this as usually, If you succeed to touch me once time, you win !”
They all agreed and we started the training. At the minute six Teana and Subaru succeed to touch me and then the battle ended.
“Ok ! Come all here !”
They come and listen me.
“-Well Done first, was a nice battle. You all make lots of progress, I’m proud of you. Now, Erio, Caro, you’ll train your defence with Vita over there. Then Subaru and Teana come with me I’ll train you today.”
The training finally ended after 3 hours and all were exhausted. So I told them to rest the afternoon, and they could do what they wanted.
I don’t really know why but I was very exhausted too. I went to Fate and My room, and I went sleep.
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N......ha
Someone calling me but I don’t really understand…
Na…..ha
Why they’re calling me I sleep so good.
Nano…
Nanoha !!
I suddenly wake up and I saw Fate-chan.
“-Good Morning Fate-chan…Why are you looking so sad Fate-chan”
She gave me a long hug and kissed me after.
“-Aaahn Fate-chan why so suddenly ?
-D….do you know how I worried ?!”
(Uuuh ? wait why being worry I just went to my bed and sleeped…)
“-Why being worry Fate-chan ? I just go sleep Yesterday.
-Ah, you can’t remember. You did that but not really like you thing.”
(seriously ?)
She continues to say:
“-You fell down in the corridor and I was in front of you. You really don’t remember ?”
(Oh my God seriously ? I don’t remember this at all)
“-But Fate-chan I sleep only a day, didn’t I ?
-N…no, yo….you sleeped a week !”
The word “week” resonated in my head, I couldn’t believe that.
Wow! Its even better then my first attempt at writing a fanfic.
sugoi...o.o
Even though your English isn't perfect, you've made me wanting more. I can't wait to find out what's causing Nanoha-dono to be so exhausted! (=3>.>)=3
Awwww too short I wanna know what's next ! >.<
Keep up the good work ! :)
Very interesting story! Can't wait for the next one. I just have to say though, medicines, such as pills, are drugs.
Hope you can get some ideas and inspiration soon!
I just read this, and I want moreeeeee. :D
So... who is getting a Starlight Breaker for druggin Nanoha?
<33 This is great! No more words, but only the word, great.
Cry baby Fate-chan. 8DDD
Here Chapter 2:
(In this sort of situation I think I should Apology to all that worried at me)
I looked Fate-chan in eyes and I said :
“Sorry Fate-chan. You worry after me, don’t you ? Come here.”
I give her back a long hug and she started to cry :
“-Mouu, Fate-chan you’re such a cry baby.
-Can you only understand how I worry it’s because I love you Nanoha…
-Yes, I know, I’m sorry Fate-chan.”
Vivio entered the room and saw me, she said :
“-Mama ?
-Yes, Vivio ?”
At my word she started to cry. I tried to stand up but I mostly fell down. Fate-chan catch me and said : “-Are you ok Nanoha ?
-Yes, sorry Fate-chan. For the moment Can you take me back to the bed ?”
Vivio was crying so much I said her :
“-My sweet Vivio can you come here, for the moment it seems like Nanoha-mama can not walk.
-uhmm…”
She came in front of me and I take her head in my hands.
“-I’m sorry my sweet Vivio, Did I worry you ?
-yes…”
I hugged her and Fate-chan was like jealous I say :
“-Mouu, Fate-chan it’s not good being jealous of our daughter, If you want a hug just say it
-Nanoha, You idiot.
-I know”
I smiled to her and she blushed but she came to me and I hug Vivio and Fate-chan.
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A week later I resumed my functions but they were still questions in my mind.
Why did I sleep so long ?
Why was I so exhausted ?
I thought that it was maybe only some fatigue, and then I didn’t mind about this anymore.
Bad choice.
The next week something happened. I was exhausted from my hard day, and I started to go back to the refectory to eat. I saw Fate-chan walking in front of me. I open my mouse to call her but my voice didn’t came out. I tried to run to her but I was too much exhausted. My vision was getting black. I fell down again. Fate-chan turn and saw me on the groud.
“Nanoha !!
Nan.h.. !
Na….a…
….”
read the second spoiler after finished read the chapter 2 please.