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Fanfiction - Lyrical Lovers

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Sayuki Minato's picture
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Well... this is my first english fiction so lost of bad grammars. English is my second language so forgive me about the grammar. Enjoy anyways. :3

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6754873/1/Lyrical_Lovers_English_ver

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For some reason, I didn't like Nanoha clinging to Yuuno and even calling him onii-chan.

And the 'I will kill you' line doesnt seem fit. >,<

It might just be me though. O,o

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Updated chap 6! And you've just read chap1 ==". Read all the chapters have been released recently.

Change your thought and you change your world. ~Norman Vincent Peale

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I... generally don't like to be the one to rain on a parade here. Especially for a non-english native speaker.

But I found something that rather disturbs me. I assume it's an innocent mistake, but; Your story, lyrical lovers is almost a word for word copy of a Satashi story from a few years ago, especially for the first few chapters.

Listed here for reference.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3991951/2/Saved_by_the_Bell

I assume that its just a coincidence, or that you really liked how that story started and wished to take it in another direction, borrowing the characters and ideas. But i would think it would be nice in this instance to reference where you got the idea from. And/or contact the author and let them know you'd like to use their ideas. That's all.

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I know the first chapters is terrible similar to Satashi's and i'm deeply sorry Satashi cuz i wrote this fic after read hers. But i've tried my best to not copy her story and the rest of story is completely different.
Once again. I'm sorry, Satashi.

Change your thought and you change your world. ~Norman Vincent Peale