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The World Revolves Around You (Update: In My Head and Puzzle Pieces)

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Nanonymous
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that is a great idea! Cuz you really dont know what nano thinks about everything that is going on. I think you should do it :) lol hopefully your wife tells you to do it also!

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My wife could tell me to jump off of a cliff and I wouldn't do it.

:P

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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The new update is promising, Nanoha hiring Fate to be her boyfriend, that could make a quite humorous story.

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I liked it too, this hired boyfriend!Fate scenario is very promising, it kind of reminds me of Tripping Velvet, but in this One Nanoha would be good... I hope.
Update soon please :D

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Oh, like where this is heading~ Always fun to see new ideas thrown into the mix of stories out there :)

Eisen, Usa-mimi Mode!

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Aha... not really. <__< You'd probably want to slap me with a baseball bat if I showed you half the crap in my fanfiction folder.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Try me :3
I'm open minded and appreciate fresh concepts. AU, if done well, is one of my secret favourites XD
I'm a bit lazy to review but
, I've read a lot of your stories and enjoy them so yeah, no problem~

Oh, if I did hit you, I'd probably choose a bill hook axe, kana? kana? :3

Eisen, Usa-mimi Mode!

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Great idea Yuki, hope tah see more of this idea.

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Nanonymous
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hopw you can continue these short stories...a lot of potential and very interesting

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>__> The little shorts I have posted here will stay here... mostly because they're little brain farts or dropped projects.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Yay for remakes!

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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great...i mean GREAT story! the only thing i didnt like is that fate died!!! :((

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This short is sad and moving, it makes me remember a personal tragedy that happens to me years ago.

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very nice story...hope you can also update on the other porjects that are on hiatsu but these shorts are welcomed with open arms

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Jeez, I'm waay too mean...

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( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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I have the feeling Fate will sleep on the couch this night after her little joke (that, or Nanoha launch a Divine Buster at her for having the gall to say Nanoha isn't the cutest girl in the world :)).

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=( I really did sleep on the couch for that comment.

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( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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*pets* Shame =/ ... is what I want to say XD You did bring that upon yourself too :P

But yeah, couch is not the best place~

Eisen, Usa-mimi Mode!

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Leave Couch alone!!! ;o;

No, my couch is -very- comfy... I actually like sleeping there. XD

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( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Hmm~
But, Couch isn't warm to snuggle against, I'd imagine? :3
Unless your couch is really different XD

Eisen, Usa-mimi Mode!

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Lol, my couch comes with a very pleasant smelling dog. :3 My Tofu (doggy) smells like peaches.

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( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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your dog's name is quite contradicting since its name is tofu but it smells like peaches.

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IKR? :P We have a cat named Dog, too... <.<

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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BPM is a big test in my abilities... I actually found it quite easy to switch between my first person writing style to third person. I'd really like to know what everyone thinks about it and tell me what I should improve on. I really gotta get used to writing like this for an upcoming project I might have with someone, and if that someone sees this by chance, hope you can tell me if it's up to snuff or not.

... time to sleep for... 30minutes then head off to work. Yay~

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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I found BPM quite good, and cute.

The switch between 1st and 3rd person style is well done and goes nicely with the flow of the story.
It's really comfortable to read.

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I didn't switch between point of views, it was just straight forward third person.

... it went a lot easier than I thought it would.

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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Arghll ! (°A°) It seems both my brains are my eyes are completely rusted.

It was a very enjoyable read, and the flow was good.

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∩ . ∩ Aha, I know that feeling.

I'm thinking about expanding it since it went so well... <__<;

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol

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I quite like your take on both first and third person style writing. You have done a great job in communicating in third person, no matter how long it's been.
I look forward to new works, keep it up :3

Generally, I tend to lean more towards third person. Though I can firmly say I don't find your first person style 'annoying'.

BPM is nice~
Also, sorry to read about your car =/

Eisen, Usa-mimi Mode!

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Aha, thanks Vita. The encouragement really helps a lot, but I'm glad it still worked out for the better.

Well, some tell me that first person is annoying especially when I do it, because I always leave whose POV it is out until it's painfully obvious who it really is.

... v.v Sharky (Mitsubishi Lancer) R.I.P... ;.;

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol