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[Fanfic] Magical Girl Lyrcial Nanoha: Ai Hazard

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This was based off a dream i had however i expanded on it and seriously put effort into releasing (though the reviewing part was a pain).

Gateway Post

don't let the URL fool you, the post serves as a gateway and for me to type up some notes/terminology. i normally write/design as if for mass production so it also serves to list all the 4 chapter volumes.

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I'm roughly about 50% though Chapter 6 which mainly focuses on Fate and Nanoha (i'm talking about the 50%, not the entire chapter), one scene is when the two get intimate.

The idea with the scene, named "A Gift Given Once", is that Nanoha and Fate share their "firsts" but it not being explicit in what they are doing but trying to convey what they feel while at the same time showing how awkward it is for them. what i want to do is post it here and see what needs to be changed, what i need to improve on.

So i ask this, people who are interested in reviewing this scene, would you want every scene of Chapter 6 which leads to "A Gift Given Once" or would you just want the scene by itself as to not spoil the lead up?

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