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[Fanfic] My Guardian Angel

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yeah, a blushing fate is always the best. man she is definitely quick. so her powers is magic, right? not like magic from a linker core, but old fashion witchery? wow that french guy did have a long name i wouldn't even know how to pronounce. funny what nanoha calls him..cuz that's even longer. hmm i wonder if he was suppose to help in killing fate. well can't wait for ur next chapter! but of course, animal instincts first!! yea yea

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Bad news: The title for "My Guardian Angel" will have to change and if I can't find an appropriate title for it soon, the series would be in a temporary standstill. Another author has a fic in ff.net titled, "Guardian Angel" (not a bad fic) and me, being a selfish person, don't like to share my title with anyone else in the same fandom. So until then, "My Guardian Angel" will be suspended until further notice.

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That's an easy one, rename it to "Tsundere Love".
...I'm serious! xD

Anyway, are you open to suggestions? Maybe something Tolkien-ish would be appropriated for this fic...

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*whispers from where she lurks in shadows*

My Fateful Knight?

*runs away quickly*

Nanonymous
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"My beloved Knight" so you can mantain the original idea of the title perhaps?

"The knight of the golden hair"

"A destinated/fated meeting in a changing world" as a sort of preview of the plot?

"A tale of a knight and a nun"

"The Sword and the pray"

perhaps somthing of the coming plot like "the great revolution" if there is going to be a revolution or "the rise of a new era" or "the break of peace and the flames of war" something like that, this is such a good history, i just love this kind of stories, of the medieval age and such, and better if it is so well redapted, is such a tragedy that it got delayed by the title, hope you find inspiration on some of this titles, sorry for the bad english.

PD: can you guys make the captcha more biger is really hard to see the numbers or letters

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Nice titles, my favorite one is "The Sword and the pray".

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PD: can you guys make the captcha more biger is really hard to see the numbers or letters

Done!

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also if its going to be and journey plot maybe

My everlasting journey with you

trought this world with you

facing the shadows with the knight

or some title that has nothing to do with the story but sounds cool

Cloud Age Simphony this is really nice title and reflects the epic era XD

the lighting and the wind

cant think of anything else....

the return of the thunder knight

the felowship of the nun

ahahahhahahahahahahah!!!

PD: thanks Haru for the capcha you are so cool! XD

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Chance Meeting My Fateful Knight :p

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Ah, you guys! >_< Thank you so much for your support! Because I've been receiving A LOT of PM's for the next chapter of Animal Instincts (English AND Spanish), I'm going to update "MGA" next month. My schedule has been very busy and I was glad I was able to post ch. 5 of "AI" on time. My next update will be Animal Instincts then "MGA" with a new title that I'll keep a secret until then. ^^ Y Haru, ¿por qué me dejaste un review en español? (^_^;) *hug* Ahora tengo dos.... XD lol

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Alavon wrote:
Ah, you guys! >_< Thank you so much for your support! Because I've been receiving A LOT of PM's for the next chapter of Animal Instincts (English AND Spanish), I'm going to update "MGA" next month. My schedule has been very busy and I was glad I was able to post ch. 5 of "AI" on time. My next update will be Animal Instincts then "MGA" with a new title that I'll keep a secret until then. ^^

Yay! More Animal Instincts!
But I want more My Guardian Angel too >.<

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Y Haru, ¿por qué me dejaste un review en español? (^_^;) *hug* Ahora tengo dos.... XD lol

¡Lo dejé para que se reproduzcan! xD
Lo escribí en Español porque escribo 10 veces más rápido en este idioma, y esa mañana escribí como 4 reviews juntos así que traté de hacerlo lo más rápido posible. Espero que no te haya importado.

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Haru wrote:

Yay! More Animal Instincts!
But I want more My Guardian Angel too >.<

I know...but the readers will kill me if I don't write about Nanoha's past...>_< They already send me death threats...

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¡Lo dejé para que se reproduzcan! xD
Lo escribí en Español porque escribo 10 veces más rápido en este idioma, y esa mañana escribí como 4 reviews juntos así que traté de hacerlo lo más rápido posible. Espero que no te haya importado.

LOL XD Ay, Haru...

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Alavon wrote:
Haru wrote:

Yay! More Animal Instincts!
But I want more My Guardian Angel too >.<

I know...but the readers will kill me if I don't write about Nanoha's past...>_< They already send me death threats...


Then don't even think about posting My Guardian Angel on ff.net, or you will start receiving twice the amount of death threats xD

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Haru wrote:

Then don't even think about posting My Guardian Angel on ff.net, or you will start receiving twice the amount of death threats xD

Heh...you really think so? (^_^;)

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Heee...I love MGA! I read all the chapters in a day, thank you Alavon for writing such interesting, delightful piece x) Looking forward for more in the future...Good job!
Btw, where is the thread or link to this Animal Instinct...? Heehe..I'm lost... xP

~ I x you, you o me ~

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http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5451815/1/Animal_Instincts
There, Animal Instincts prologue.

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Titi wrote:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5451815/1/Animal_Instincts
There, Animal Instincts prologue.

Uuu~Thank you very much, Titi.
Help is highly appreciated ;D
I'm no longer lost

~ I x you, you o me ~

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Animal Instincts and My Guardian Angel, both are nice XD

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Fate Trulygood wrote:
Animal Instincts and My Guardian Angel, both are nice XD

Yeah, I like both, but AI have a something more, I don't know why...its like Satashi fics, I am addicted to AI, its that kind of fic that I when I see a new chapter I get all happy, thanks for your great work Avalon :)

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i liked them both *_* i want to read them all please update fast i really liked this...i was thinking if you dont post this fanfic in ff.net i really need to stay in touch in nanofate.us by the way im powerd in ff.net i really liked ur works

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Animal Instincts Update info: 40%
My Guardian Angel Update info: 10%

Please forgive my lateness. Certain things happened that pushed me back...a bit. Okay, a lot. Anyway, please look forward to next months update on AI!

Animal Instincts (Chapter 6): Last time we left our heroines, Nanoha was badly beaten by Martin and as a result, had a miscarriage. Will Nanoha finally tell Fate her story or will she shut herself up once more?

My Guardian Angel (chapter 4): Pierre, Fate's childhood friend suddenly appears out of the blue and claims that Knight Fate should be dead. Can Sister Nanoha break Knight Fate out of her shell and tell her story or will she be stuck arguing with an egotistical, emotionally unbalanced and prone to temper tantrums of a person? Or will something more blossom?

Please look forward to next month! And again, I apologize for disappearing like that.

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Yes! Thanks for the Update! XD
I will definitly look forward to it!

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It's alright mate/luv, I'm actually a big fan of yer works and I bet they'll be worth the wait.

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Thanks for the update !

I'll look forward to next month, then.

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Thanks for the info Alavon, it's good to know that you're continuing your fics, honestly I was a bit worried about them. I hope that everything goes well, I'll be looking forward to your next update, especially to My Guardian Angel, I really love that fic.

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Thanks for the update info, Alavon, I´ll waiting for the next chapters and know the wait it´ll worth ^^

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I will be looking forward to Animal Instincts *.*

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Just a reminder for anyone who forgot/miss the sneak peek pic when I posted it before. It's in Image Thread or just look into my Gallery. In case you've already forgot how the pic look like ^^!!

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Guess who's back? Back again?

lol

Sorry, I couldn't help myself. Anyway, I have some major news regarding my fics, Animal Instincts and My Guardian Angel. Very soon, I'll be heading off to Puerto Rico for vacation and where I will be staying does not have ANY INTERNET WHATSOEVER. So, there will be no updates for AT LEAST a month and a half.

But DON'T WORRY! I will have two separate notebooks for each of my fics so that when I do come back, all I have to do is type the chapters up.

Due to this, I decided to give you readers a special Knight Fate "Side-Story" that was originally lost after my laptop's hard-drive crashed. A very close friend of mine had the outline for the story and just recently found it while she was cleaning up her emails (I forgot I had emailed it to her :/). She doesn't have the story itself but the foundation which was easy for me to start re-writing it. It's still a work-in progress but it will soon be finished.

Both Animal Instincts and the Knight Fate's "Side-story" will be updated before the 29th of this month so please, stay with me a little while longer. *bow*

Now, without further ado, here is an excerpt of My Guardian Angel: Fate's Descent!

Draft Version 1.2 (Un-betad):

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My Guardian Angel:
Fate's Descent

By:
Alavon

x~~~x

I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I-
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference.

-Robert Frost

x~~~x

The thought of dying has never really crossed my mind. Even at a tender age of nine, all I ever thought about was pleasing my mother. If she wanted me to jump, I jumped. If she wanted me to hurt myself, I'll grab a knife and stab myself in the arm. And if she wanted someone dead, I would carry it out without a second thought. I loved my mother that much and no matter what Linith says, my love for her had no boundaries. I never once questioned my mother's motives. She was my life, my God...my, my everything. I would go to the ends of the earth for her sake.

Yes...I never thought of death, ever...

...not even when I was surrounded by a band of Neo Francaesian Knights all those years ago.

The only thing that crossed my mind was that I failed mother.

POW!

Before I had a chance to react, I was punched a few feet away by a bulky Neo Francaesian Knight, his laughter echoing into the darkening forest of Winsterhale like a hyaena. After I landed with a thud, I tried desperately to stand up up but my bruised arms gave in and I collapsed on to the hard and cold dirt, breathing erratically.

After the Knight had punched me, he took out his sword, it's silvery hilt gleaming beneath the bronze hue moon hovering above between the clouds and the fir trees. He slowly licked his weapon, a maniacal gleam escaping her bushed eyebrows.

“You know where I got this fine sword from, hm?” he spat, twirling it around. “ My great-great-great grandfather fought during the Second Belkan War and was personally given this-” He swung it down in in front of me and stopped only a inch from my head. “-from Claus Ingvalt de Hegemon himself.”

He then proceeded to laugh again but this time, his subordinates joined him. When he saw me giving him a look of disgust, he raised his hand to his side to silence his men who complied almost immediately. Taking off his decorated helmet, he crouched down a feet away, using his sword for support. Leaning towards me with the most hateful expression imaginable, he growled, “You should feel honored that a member of the prestigious Lefèvre family will pass judgment on you with the very sword that was used by the great ruler Claus.”

I stared at his metal boots and...I smirked.

“I see...now I get it...” I whispered, just enough for the man to hear. “No wonder...”

The man raised an eyebrow and asked, “What do you get, salope?”

I coughed up blood, “No wonder your boots are so clean. You never really dirtied your hands with big fries...you only get satisfaction from bossing around people who seem weaker than you-”

In an instant, another blow was given to me and that had made me slam hard against a tree. I spat out blood and when I slid to the ground I screamed, feeling my left ribs cracked. The screams of pain did not last long and I soon began to laugh, rolling myself on my back to face the semi-cloudy sky. I heard twigs breaking and the face of my tormentor appeared above, obstructing my view.

He brought the tip of the sword to my neck, and I felt warm liquid trailing down...

“Any last words before you go headless?” he breathed icily, bringing the sword above his head.

Silence took hold of us all and the only noise that could be heard was the low whistling of the wind brushing pass in a oblivious manner. Colored leaves and dirt swirled around us and for a moment, I relaxed, enjoying the gentle breeze of the night brought upon by an unknown force.

"Va te faire foutre, trouduc...”

Roaring, the man who claims to be from the Lefèvre family swung all of his might towards my neck and I closed my eyes, waiting for the inevitable-

Forgive me mother...

WOOT!

A gurgling scream pierced the night and I opened one of my eyes only to see my suppose executioner trying to pull out a glowing blue arrow from a tree that had embedded itself through his sword and hand.

“Normally, I don't like using this sort of method to teach a lesson,” said a young man to my right. “Especially when I can use my magic just to tie you up but-” I heard the footsteps stopped suddenly and I hesitantly turned to face him. “-But, I need to show what will happen if a soldier disregard an order from his superior.”

My eyes went round as soon as I saw his face, and at that very moment, I wished to be nothing more then an invisible object. Short, blue-purplish hair was stuck to his head in odd angles due to wearing a helmet which was tucked away under his arm. Greyish-blue eyes stared down on me, unwavering and no matter how hard I tried, I could never take my eyes from his. His cape floated behind him gently after a light breeze flowed through the surrounded area.

“K-Knight Chrono de H-Harleown...” gasped the Lefèvre man, wincing to the slightest movement he makes. “I-I found the thief and-”

Knight Chrono cut him off with a stare. “I don't want to hear it! The order that we gave you was to apprehend the thief, not to exact justice! That is NOT in your jurisdiction!”

Knight Chrono stared at the cowering soldier and after a minute, turned his attention back at me, the look on his face not changing in the slightest. He then began to walk towards me and the other Knights all stepped away from him in fear. Knight Chrono paid them no heed and I soon found myself face-to-face with the most famous warrior in all of Neo Francaesia.

“Burgundy eyes...” he muttered under his breath. “There is only one family with that feature...the Testarossa family...”

My breathing got heavier and all I could hear was my deep breathing and erratic heartbeat. I wanted to be anywhere...any place where he was not present. I tried to move my body but as soon as I did, unimaginable pain took control of my body and blood gushed out of my mouth. I wanted to scream but I held it in.

Knight Chrono stared at me with a blank look on his face and right when I thought he was gonna leave, he looked at my worn-out girdle and reached toward the small, brown bag tied to it. After bouncing it slightly on his right palm, he opened it and poured the contents on to his left.

Sighing, he said in a matter-of-fact tone, “You do know that what you are carrying is illegal, right?”

When I didn't respond, he continued. “Having these Sacred Jewels in your possession is punishable by death.”

I twitched but did not say anything; the pain was finally having a toll on me. Realizing that he was not going to get anything out of me about the objects in question, he asked, “How old are you?”

Without even thinking, I answered out of habit, “Nine...”

He whistled in amazement. “Nine...that is really impressive-”

“Give me those Sacred Jewels back!” I croaked, tears finally escaping me. “Mother...mother needs them...please...”

“No can't do,” said Knight Chrono after securing the bag around his own leather girdle.

“P-please...” I begged, raising a trembling hand towards him, my focus becoming hazy. “Please...g-give them b-back...”

He looked down at me and for the first time in my life, I saw pity. He brought his hand to his face and rubbed his eyes tiredly. Without saying a word, he kneel beside me and brought his hands together. In an instant, a blue, Mid-Childean symbol appeared before him and hovered above me.

“A Testarossa...” said Knight Chrono to himself. “I thought that they were wiped out four years ago...”

And...

...the world went pitch black.

Author's Note:

Spoiler:
You're probably wondering, "What happened to Chapter 4 of My Guardian Angel"?! Well, chapter 4 is going smoothly but because there are certain complex situations that occur within that chapter, I have to take my time with it and since I can finish both Chapter 6 for Animal Instincts and the Knight Fate's "Side-story" before the 29th, I decided to postponed that chapter to give you readers two updates instead of just one. Again, I apologize for the lateness.

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BANZI! Avalon is back! Joy to the world! Have fun in Puerto Rico! Thanks for updating

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Welcome back "Alavon". <__< See, I spelled it right!

On a side note - My friend almost rear ended a Toyota Avalon. The poor sedan didn't stand a chance against my friend's Prius!

Dreams do come true! 8D

( ì x î ) I feel sorry for that little girl. Lol